Sleeping bag cocoon
on a bench by the river;
what a clear strong image. Will he become a butterfly soon then? got me to think about the movie “cherryblossoms” about a german widowers friendship with a young butoh-dancer in Japan.
And then I noticed that I would have enjoyed the rhythm even more without the “a” and “the” – and that is not a critique, just a personal liking –
Thanks for the feedback – I know the articles in English are often unnecessary in haiku, but I think I’ll leave them this time 🙂
yes of course – just a matter of personal taste
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